DRP Activity Part 2: Transitions
Look at your transitions between paragraphs. Just like each page of your DRP needs to stand on its own, each paragraph needs to work on its own, too.
- Clean up the last sentence of each paragraph so that it no longer foreshadows the next one. It should feel like a true “last sentence,” not a “preview of coming attractions” sentence.
- Revise the first sentence of each paragraph to incorporate that “does phrase” you wrote in Part 1. What you’re doing here is easing your reader into this paragraph more gently so that the first line of each paragraph isn’t coming out of nowhere.
- Example:
- Original from CAP:
- Farmers who use GM crops report an increase in crop yields.
- Revision for DRP:
- To see how GM crops benefit crop yields, let’s turn to Bob Breadwinner, a farmer who has experienced this firsthand. In his blog post, Breadwinner, a soybean farmer in Podunk, Kansas, explains how his crop yield increased by X% once he started using GM seeds: “Blah blah pathos quote blah” (para. 8).
- Original from CAP:
- Example: