DRP Activity Part 3: Clarity
- Take a close look at your analysis/ forwarding. Break down your quotes AND your paraphrases, explain what they mean, why they’re relevant, how they relate to your thesis, and why your audience should care about this random claim/ idea/ story/ data. Your web audience needs you to spell things out more clearly.
- Analyze your sentences for tone. You were asked to elevate your diction for an academic audience in your CAP. Now, you need to undo that. That doesn’t mean adding a bunch of modifiers and using slang. It means tightening up your prose (again) for wordiness. It means breaking some of your longer sentences into two. It means combining other sentences into one. It means doing a lot of what this writer did HERE
- Look for any “synthesis” sentences that put authors into conversation with each other. In your CAPs, this was really important so that your readers remembered everyone. In your DRPs, this needs to be revised, because your audience may not have read that “previous” paragraph where you introduced that other source.
- Revise the sentence so that it doesn’t sound as though your audience should know who that other author is. This will mean repeating yourself slightly across pages, which is okay.
- Give your audience necessary context by doing one of these:
- Hyperlink the other author to his/ her source
- Hyperlink the other author to the page on your DRP where you introduce that person
- Give your audience necessary context by doing one of these:
- Revise the sentence so that it doesn’t sound as though your audience should know who that other author is. This will mean repeating yourself slightly across pages, which is okay.